tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post2305026088604572534..comments2023-10-15T07:36:05.092-07:00Comments on A Piece Of Mind: Dreamworld (RWP #100)Cynthia Shorthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-21834262090079235862009-11-17T03:16:44.578-07:002009-11-17T03:16:44.578-07:00Very vivid piece, although I must say that if I ev...Very vivid piece, although I must say that if I ever had a dream like this I may put off sleeping for a week or so.samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16756849716216336290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-19508158314872413242009-11-15T00:45:34.856-07:002009-11-15T00:45:34.856-07:00Creepy, scary. Wow.Creepy, scary. Wow.Tamrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08016702051457729026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-72998392730890700232009-11-13T21:13:01.574-07:002009-11-13T21:13:01.574-07:00Scarry!!!!Nice oneScarry!!!!Nice oneJeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-22501943690033056612009-11-13T08:30:44.490-07:002009-11-13T08:30:44.490-07:00Can only agree that the atmosphere you build is te...Can only agree that the atmosphere you build is terrifying -- and with all the descriptions & stanzas you use "panic and terror" only once! I wonder if you could take out those words and still show the nightmare. I'm betting you could/would!Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14744896385434246402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-69091989555392307902009-11-13T07:43:46.827-07:002009-11-13T07:43:46.827-07:00A truly good piece of atmospheric writing. I have ...A truly good piece of atmospheric writing. I have been in that place and recognized it immediately!Tom Atkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15068850208360958008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-59498635555172743242009-11-12T16:47:54.303-07:002009-11-12T16:47:54.303-07:00Terrifying, claustrophic, it depicts a fear of the...Terrifying, claustrophic, it depicts a fear of the abyss. I could identify with being trapped in a dream like that, Cynthia.Irenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12918979903066830662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-62256159233260584002009-11-12T15:21:35.484-07:002009-11-12T15:21:35.484-07:00"breath shallow and strangled" a very cu..."breath shallow and strangled" a very cutting and desperate line cynthia. you strong and vivd language throughout plays well with the opening image, sets off a very solitary and daunting environment for the words that follow. an enjoyable read on a very wet, noir day. -lawrenceLawrence Gladeviewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10074490753640053690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-74725268574885553662009-11-12T15:02:08.368-07:002009-11-12T15:02:08.368-07:00I have to agree with David. I really identify with...I have to agree with David. I really identify with the urgency. The anxiety of trying to escape the pressure cooker is overwhelming and terrifying. This was a very compelling poem that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-64209892900212010412009-11-12T14:38:35.323-07:002009-11-12T14:38:35.323-07:00Very viscerally described Cynthia. I really get t...Very viscerally described Cynthia. I really get the sense of a dream, not of the processed images, but of the temporal shifts and the mood, the urgency.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-78963175111294141242009-11-12T11:01:48.889-07:002009-11-12T11:01:48.889-07:00Great telling of scary dream material, Cynthia! l...Great telling of scary dream material, Cynthia! love the way your italicized <i>I must, I must</i> highlights the intensity of the dream experience of knowing what must be done while experiencing the unfolding of action that prevents.<br /><br />Nicely told!Paul Oakleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-38661851956479432692009-11-12T09:19:06.822-07:002009-11-12T09:19:06.822-07:00I like spooky stuff. And you had me totally hooked...I like spooky stuff. And you had me totally hooked<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2009/11/skin-dreams.html" rel="nofollow">skin dreams</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-58250952497391021802009-11-12T09:15:47.326-07:002009-11-12T09:15:47.326-07:00Hi Cynthia,
"unintelligible garbling", ...Hi Cynthia,<br /><br />"unintelligible garbling", surely not! I'm glad this was your dream. Way too scary!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-62346003395831667892009-11-12T08:17:43.299-07:002009-11-12T08:17:43.299-07:00You do a great job conveying the feeling that many...You do a great job conveying the feeling that many of us have in dreams -- can't find, can't move, can't speak, can't escape. The maze of mind, or the existential labyrinth, is an enduring symbol, featured of course, in many myths and rituals. I like that this poem could be about someone's attempt to be rescued, or possibly also about her attempt to rescue someone/something else. And I like how you end the poem perfectly -- just as most dreams end -- just on the verge of annihilation or capture...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-69358929185776772762009-11-12T08:12:13.313-07:002009-11-12T08:12:13.313-07:00Wow, Cynthia, this one really grabs ones attention...Wow, Cynthia, this one really grabs ones attention! Very eerie and very well told ~ I could feel the terror in your voice here. Wonderful!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-90709101983350635802009-11-12T08:11:00.889-07:002009-11-12T08:11:00.889-07:00this goes with the spooky tale. I want to find so...this goes with the spooky tale. I want to find someone and just yell boo!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com