tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post5329735548331063264..comments2023-10-15T07:36:05.092-07:00Comments on A Piece Of Mind: Street Performer (RWP Prompt #90)Cynthia Shorthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-70990211688088060432009-09-11T14:53:05.483-07:002009-09-11T14:53:05.483-07:00I also quite like what you've done with this. ...I also quite like what you've done with this. Great write.Radio Nowherehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03676632225985024369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-90383791578820579012009-09-11T01:07:09.179-07:002009-09-11T01:07:09.179-07:00Hi Cynthia,I love your line of thought :)Hi Cynthia,I love your line of thought :)M. Rekahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12178807956502786062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-11132981896021177132009-09-04T18:21:43.112-07:002009-09-04T18:21:43.112-07:00You really get to the heart of the image with this...You really get to the heart of the image with this one, Cynthia.Nathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-76144273563085547742009-09-04T16:05:44.725-07:002009-09-04T16:05:44.725-07:00Burnt flesh a written
declaration of sacrifice.
Pr...<i>Burnt flesh a written<br />declaration of sacrifice.<br />Praying it will be great enough<br />to bring forgiveness.</i><br /><br />Nice touch! Nice that you leave it an unanswered question.Paul Oakleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-55933306446829123162009-09-04T12:25:45.205-07:002009-09-04T12:25:45.205-07:00I too liked the split in stanzas and perspective b...I too liked the split in stanzas and perspective between the performer and the audience in the poem. The shift in tone was ironic and effective, making clear how even a sympathetic bystander still has no idea what he's witness to compared with the performer.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-54857438325264757132009-09-04T09:48:16.367-07:002009-09-04T09:48:16.367-07:00This line grabbed me because even the offerings ar...This line grabbed me because even the offerings are given in the wrong way --<br /><br />onlookers toss offerings of<br />grimy coins and crumpled notesAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-48660446213093776562009-09-03T16:44:43.439-07:002009-09-03T16:44:43.439-07:00I really liked the juxtaposition between what the ...I really liked the juxtaposition between what the performer is feeling and what the crowd's reaction. The spiritual versus the very worldly.Francis Scudellarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-23497285987267085872009-09-03T16:08:12.166-07:002009-09-03T16:08:12.166-07:00I think the last line makes it work - the performe...I think the last line makes it work - the performer does it because he needs to, and the audience is just a side effect - much like writing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-85540903508004128122009-09-03T11:01:50.806-07:002009-09-03T11:01:50.806-07:00I like the way you wrote about the performs work a...I like the way you wrote about the performs work and then the response from the audience. There is always the supposition that more goes out than comes back in rewards. All that "burnt flesh" for a "smattering of applause". This is a thoughtfully put together poem with accurate observations. Thanks for sharing!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-70114591702550493222009-09-03T09:58:15.725-07:002009-09-03T09:58:15.725-07:00You nailed with that last line!
geometry of firew...You nailed with that last line!<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2009/09/geometry-of-fireworks-cuts-into-me.html" rel="nofollow">geometry of fireworks cuts into me</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-8574189454294036772009-09-03T09:03:27.493-07:002009-09-03T09:03:27.493-07:00I know why that guy needed forgiveness.I know why that guy needed forgiveness.rallentandahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06980559347805844568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-7613794193119346592009-09-03T08:15:57.920-07:002009-09-03T08:15:57.920-07:00Mesmerized and mystified
onlookers...
followed clo...Mesmerized and mystified<br />onlookers...<br />followed closely by Murmured voices...<br /><br />does give a crowd background rumble sound that is very niceAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-77315791058409285552009-09-03T07:34:21.660-07:002009-09-03T07:34:21.660-07:00Yes, the line "he doesn't even notice the...Yes, the line "he doesn't even notice them" - truly present in his moment! Great observation.Leslie Avon Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09235003342775117469noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-76159778819733157372009-09-03T06:30:49.067-07:002009-09-03T06:30:49.067-07:00"He doesn't even notice them" After..."He doesn't even notice them" Afterall why should he? Bravo. And I love this to start my day. Have a wonderful weekend. JulieAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03880423962558874898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2285017393769287433.post-53902844221370643532009-09-03T06:05:01.601-07:002009-09-03T06:05:01.601-07:00Hi Cynthia,
Nicely done, a mixture of reality and...Hi Cynthia,<br /><br />Nicely done, a mixture of reality and something deeper. I really like:<br />"Burnt flesh a written<br />declaration of sacrifice. <br />Praying it will be great enough<br />to bring forgiveness."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.com