May 21, 2010

War Within (BTP #3)



(fish scales courtesy of Photobucket)
There were some really interesting words in the prompt this week.  At first I used a majority of them, but they didn't make it through my "slash and burn" editing!  They did remind me of a theme, one which is a recurrent one with me...

Resistance is futile.

I doff my scales with my convictions-

all lay crumpled,

shed like armor,

-my caparison-

that once guarded me from

every hurtful word,

or fondled loving touch.


As finally I capitulate,

remove each barrier to closeness,

 I still retain

one small and tender bit,

-my protection-

folded gently,

and hid within some sacred purse

at rest within my silent heart.
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This theme of protecting oneself from hurt and suffering by not letting go and being full open to others is something I struggle with daily.  It is a learned response.  (Writing poetry has really helped me with this...)
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14 comments:

  1. vivienne blakeMay 21, 2010 at 5:50 AM

    This is just gorgeous. A lovely economical use of the Wordle words - more would have spoiled it.
    I also love your pictures - they'd make great quilts!

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  2. UnknownMay 21, 2010 at 6:42 AM

    This is a beautiful product from the chosen words, Cynthia.

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  3. Raven's Wing PoetryMay 21, 2010 at 6:55 AM

    And keep on writing. This is a beautiful testament to how we must drop the armor we raise around ourselves if we are to be open, love, and live. I am struggling with the same thing.

    The word use is excellent here: nothing superfluous, nothing wasted.

    -Nicole

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  4. flaubertMay 21, 2010 at 8:59 AM

    Wonderful work with this prompt!
    Pamela

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  5. AnaMay 21, 2010 at 1:20 PM

    this is so true-. I relate as I have the same tendency , to isolate myself so I don't get hurt...

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  6. Tumblewords:May 21, 2010 at 1:50 PM

    Well said - I love the continued seeking and folded protection.

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  7. Linda francesMay 21, 2010 at 4:14 PM

    I love where the prompt led you-- evocative piece.

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  8. DebMay 22, 2010 at 4:27 AM

    You've captured one of humanity's recurring themes so beautifully. I like the words you kept, and the brevity. That works for the tenderness, the guardedness "folded gently" in "some sacred purse." Well done!

    (And beautiful artwork to accompany it, too!)

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  9. IreneMay 22, 2010 at 4:54 PM

    A beautiful caparison of a poem Cynthia. I think this one's a gem.

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  10. Linda GoinMay 23, 2010 at 7:43 AM

    Absolutely divine in the simplicity and moment, but especially liked that "sacred purse." The image is gorgeous!

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  11. AnonymousMay 23, 2010 at 8:01 AM

    "folded gently/ and hid" is my favorite part!

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  12. Francis ScudellariMay 23, 2010 at 12:14 PM

    I love that image of the last tender bit too. We all struggle with this to some degree.

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  13. Joyce Ellen DavisMay 23, 2010 at 4:43 PM

    Good work! You did well!

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  14. rallentandaMay 23, 2010 at 7:06 PM

    Nice poem Cynthia.

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