June 17, 2010

Broken (BTP#7)


This week's prompt over at http://bigtentpoetry.org was a "Wordle" or list of words to incorporate into a work of poetry.  I managed to use most, but not quite all...

Starving for praise,
for empathy,
for tenderness,
craved as mother's milk,
yet unfulfilled.
Resentment grows
thick tendrils,
cocooning,
strangling,
until blotted dull
through time
and hopelessness,
 these frozen stars-
once beacons of belief,
 now unforgiving,
dark and
dangerous,
can receive no comfort,
and impart 
no warmth.
 .
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Sorry to be so very dark, but that is where the "wordle" words took me; I thought of a child not having their emotional needs met, and what the result so often is. (ps: the above photo reminded me of a cocoon being unwound)

21 comments:

  1. The darkness of your post is an appropriate way to deliver the message.

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  2. That is dark, but most of the poems are this week. Nicely done.

    http://thelaughinghousewife.wordpress.com

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  3. This wordle prompt has certainly provoked some good poetry, serious and well thought through.

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  4. Off topic, where do you find those marvellous photos? They are nudging something in my head for a quilt design.

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  5. As I am reading these poems, seems many are dark. (Mine too.) It must have been the words. You chose an important subject to write about and accomplished it well.

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2010/06/looking-for-love.html

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  6. Resentment grows thick tendrils.... this is beautiful. Let these beautiful dark pieces rise, Cynthia. If "Broken" is any indication, you do it quite well.

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  7. Good poem, Cynthia! I love "these frozen stars". For some reason I thought the wordle was for next week, so haven't done one!
    Love the new look too!

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  8. cynthia
    I can feel the darkness pulling me in while reading this!
    Well done!
    Pamela

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  9. oooh like the new digs

    good work with the wordle. lots of darker ones this week, must have been "dangerous" in the list. oddly, I went cheerful.

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  10. what an ending! "and impart no warmth"

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  11. Resentment really can eat away at a person. It is better to forgive and move on.

    Strong poem!

    http://troublebeingstrong.blogspot.com/2010/06/call-to-hunger.html

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  12. I like the idea of cold stars, how something so normally uplifting is not. Great metaphor!

    (Oh, and if I didn't say so before -- I like the new layout, too. :-) )

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  13. I like the way you created a strong picture of resentment. Emotional poem.

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  14. these frozen stars-
    once beacons of belief,
    now unforgiving

    Great images. The message is delivered well through the structure . . . and the ending -- goes out with a whimper.

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  15. A dark poem indeed, but the images deliver a great message and carried the poem all the way through! Great work!

    -Weasel

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  16. A sad poem. There are so many people who are damaged because of their childhood.

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  17. Coincidentally, mine was also on similar lines... not exactly same, but

    child's emotional needs are important - a very valid message

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  18. Beautifully done! Impart no warmth - says so much more than those three words! Are you using Apophysis to create your fractals?

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  19. Reading these lines, I could feel the yearning draining away to the coldness you describe. Funny though, when I look at the image I see the butterfly with its wings unfurled.

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  20. An interesting dark poem Cynthia. So true.

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