(Photo above of Eve just trying to put food on the table and Adam just trying to cop a feel...)Over at Read, Write, Poem this week, we were given a prompt to write a poem about SEX! As I have been married to the same man for 34 years, and have NEVER been a dewy-eyed romantic, I just had to go with what I know....
SCENE I
Come gimme a kiss...
I’m washing dishes.
Just sit down, they’ll keep...
But it’s so late!
But you're so sexy...
I haven't even combed my hair today!
That's good cuz I'm gonna mess it up...
You ARE relentless.
Just look what you do to me...
I’ve seen that thing a million times.
You know you want it...
Honey, I’m tired.
You won’t have to do a thing...
Huh?
Just lay back and enjoy it...
That’s gross.
Don’t be such a party pooper...
Oh... all right.
Mmmm, You taste good...
Your whiskers are scratchy.
God, I love your tits...
Honey, wait!
Wait for what?
Not yet...
Come on, you know you want to...
Ohhhh, No....
Does this feel good?...
Ohhhh, Yes!
How ‘bout this?...
Let’s go in the bedroom.
Nah, it's better on the couch...
But the kids might wake up.
I’ll be quiet...
But I won’t!
SCENE II
What's for dinner?
Wouldn't you like a drink first?...
Silly question.
There now, isn't this nice...
What are you all made-up for?
Can't a girl try to look pretty once in a while?...
You don't have to do that for me.
I know.(This might be harder than I thought...)
Damn, I'm exhausted.
Poor baby...
Where are the kids?
At my mom's...
What for?
Thought we could use some alone time...
You're kidding, right?
I wouldn't kid about that...
I wanted to watch the game!
Wouldn't you rather look at this instead...
Turn that back on!
Oh, I'll turn something on...
Well, aren't you just a nasty little thing?SCENE I
Come gimme a kiss...
I’m washing dishes.
Just sit down, they’ll keep...
But it’s so late!
But you're so sexy...
I haven't even combed my hair today!
That's good cuz I'm gonna mess it up...
You ARE relentless.
Just look what you do to me...
I’ve seen that thing a million times.
You know you want it...
Honey, I’m tired.
You won’t have to do a thing...
Huh?
Just lay back and enjoy it...
That’s gross.
Don’t be such a party pooper...
Oh... all right.
Mmmm, You taste good...
Your whiskers are scratchy.
God, I love your tits...
Honey, wait!
Wait for what?
Not yet...
Come on, you know you want to...
Ohhhh, No....
Does this feel good?...
Ohhhh, Yes!
How ‘bout this?...
Let’s go in the bedroom.
Nah, it's better on the couch...
But the kids might wake up.
I’ll be quiet...
But I won’t!
SCENE II
What's for dinner?
Wouldn't you like a drink first?...
Silly question.
There now, isn't this nice...
What are you all made-up for?
Can't a girl try to look pretty once in a while?...
You don't have to do that for me.
I know.(This might be harder than I thought...)
Damn, I'm exhausted.
Poor baby...
Where are the kids?
At my mom's...
What for?
Thought we could use some alone time...
You're kidding, right?
I wouldn't kid about that...
I wanted to watch the game!
Wouldn't you rather look at this instead...
Turn that back on!
Oh, I'll turn something on...
I thought that's why you married me...
You're right about that, get over here!
You're right about that, get over here!
Cute! You are such a good writer....
ReplyDeleteI didn't know you were married to an Australian!
ReplyDeleteHey,let's run away to France and get a couple of French lovers!
Oooo Cynthia,
ReplyDeleteAnd I thought you were such a sweet, clean-living, kinda girl!
I enjoyed the two perspectives. It felt like we were stepping into your intimate moment. (Does your husband know you were writing this? LOL)
ReplyDeleteI like both the POVs. What a pleasure to read this.
ReplyDeleteIsn't it wonderful to be able to put into words a fantasy? It is fantasy, isn't it Cynthia? If not you'll have a lot of explaining to justify the house fire. I believe you delivered on the prompt, and very well!
ReplyDeleteRegards,
DH
Ah,Cynthia ~ proof love and lust endure! You really put your own stamp on this prompt. Your husband should feel complimented! Great work!
ReplyDeleteThank you for proving, through dramatic talk, that sex in a long-term marriage can be as good as any other. I like the strategy of the poem's structure: Act I gives prologue; Act II gives a reverse mirror version of prologue; ACT III (climax? denouement?) is left to our imagination...
ReplyDeleteI like the way Scenes I and II are mirror images of each other. The symmetry gives the poem a comfortable egalitarian justice that might appear missing in either scene alone.
ReplyDeleteBrilliantly done.
ReplyDeleteAnd aren't you just poetic brazen little...?
I echo Paul's comment. Together, they express a beauty of love. Separately, they wouldn't work as well.
Cynthia,
ReplyDeleteVery nice repartee; you really have a feel for dialogue and both parts of the poem complement and need each other. This is personal in its details, but immediately understood and felt by everyone else.
I loved the two POVs and differently the dynamics played out as they both led to the same place. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem in two acts. It is very personal but at the same time universal because every marriage has disconnects like this from time to time. The dynamics were creatively constructed. Thank you for sharing this, Cynthia. =D
ReplyDeletehi Cynthia, I like how you flipped this. The dialogue is so true to life.
ReplyDeleteDifferent as day and night, but the result's....
ReplyDeletegood fun, Cynth. You've got a winner.
Hey, have you been spying at my house (POV #1 sounds very familiar). Great job!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed both
ReplyDeleteNot a dewy-eyed romantic? Well that's just fine. Room enough for what's playfully sensual and erotic! Happily explicit of those moments transitional, from no-thanks to maybe to oh-yes. I tend to be very fond of those moments too! Well written conversationally, and that yes, does also work to involve us within the scene. Very well written.
ReplyDeleteLol, fabulous!! Brilliant work :-)
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